一、避免使用語意弱的“be”動(dòng)詞。

1、把句中的表語轉(zhuǎn)換為不同的修飾語。例如：

Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape.

Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green.

2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變?yōu)樾袨閯?dòng)詞。例如：

1) Weak: The team members are good players.

Revision: The team members play well.

2) Weak: One worker's plan is the elimination of tardiness.

Revision: One worker's plan eliminates tardiness.

3、在以“here”或“there”開頭的句子中，把“be”動(dòng)詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如：

1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion.

Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists.

2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered.

Revision: The books you ordered have arrived.

二、多用語意具體的動(dòng)詞，保持句意簡(jiǎn)潔明了。例如：

1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk.

Better: My supervisor sauntered past my desk.

2、Poor: She is a careful shopper.

Better: She compares prices and quality.

三、盡量運(yùn)用主動(dòng)語態(tài)。例如：

1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity.

Better: Charity has supported the organization.

2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate.

Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。例如：

1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk.

2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores.

五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業(yè)術(shù)語。例如：

1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals.

2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.